Practice Cutting the Clutter in Your Writing

Editing to Eliminate Deadwood

Cutting the clutter from your writing

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What we take out of our writing can be just as important as what we put in. Here we'll apply some key editing strategies for cutting out needless words--deadwood that only bores, distracts, or confuses our readers.

Tips to Cut the Clutter

Before starting this exercise, keep these tips in mind for eliminating clutter in your writing:

  1. Reduce long clauses to shorter phrases.
  2. Reduce phrases to single words.
  3. Avoid There is, There are, and There were as sentence openers.
  4. Don't overwork modifiers.
  5. Avoid redundancies.
  6. Use active verbs.
  7. Don't try to show off.
  8. Cut empty phrases.
  9. Avoid using noun forms of verbs.
  10. Replace vague nouns with more specific words.

Practice Cutting the Clutter

Now, let's put this advice to work. The sentences below contain unnecessary words. Without eliminating any essential information, revise each sentence to make it more concise. When you're done, compare your revisions with the shortened sentences below them.

  1. In the cellar, there are four wooden-type crates with nothing in them that might perhaps be used by us for storing paint cans inside of.
  2. This morning at 6:30 a.m., I woke up out of sleep to hear my alarm go off, but the alarm was turned off by me, and I returned back to a sleeping state.
  3. The reason that Merdine was not able to be in attendance at the hockey game was because she had jury duty.
  4. Omar and I, we returned back to the hometown where we both grew up to attend a reunion of the people that we went to high school with ten years ago in the past.
  5. Melba has designed a very unique kind of shirt that is made out of a polyester type of material that never creases into wrinkles when it rains and the shirt gets wet.
  6. She used her money to purchase a large-type desk made of mahogany wood that is dark brown in color and handsome to look at.
  7. In view of the fact that it was raining down, orders were given that the game be canceled.
  8. At that point in time when Marie was a teenager the basic fundamentals of how to dance were first learned by her.
  9. Some sort of identification that would show how old we were was requested of us by the man that collects tickets from people at the movie theater.
  10. There is a possibility that one of the causes of so many teenagers running away from home is the fact that many of them have indifferent parents who don't really care about them.

Here are edited versions of the above sentences:

  1. We could store the paint cans in the four wooden crates in the cellar.
  2. I awoke this morning at 6:30 but then turned off the alarm and went back to sleep.
  3. Because she had jury duty, Merdine was not at the hockey game.
  4. Omar and I returned to our hometown to attend our ten-year high school reunion.
  5. Melba has designed a polyester shirt that never creases when wet.
  6. She purchased a large, handsome-looking mahogany desk.
  7. The game was canceled because of rain.
  8. Marie learned how to dance when she was a teenager.
  9. The ticket collector at the movie theater asked us for identification.
  10. Perhaps one reason that so many teenagers run away from home is that their parents don't care about them.
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Nordquist, Richard. "Practice Cutting the Clutter in Your Writing." ThoughtCo, Aug. 26, 2020, Nordquist, Richard. (2020, August 26). Practice Cutting the Clutter in Your Writing. Retrieved from Nordquist, Richard. "Practice Cutting the Clutter in Your Writing." ThoughtCo. (accessed June 8, 2023).